Help! Again

I ask for you help. Again.
You may have checked out the song sample I composed and uploaded earlier this month. Well that one's almost done. A few final finishing touches and it'll be a free mp3 download:D.
But in the meantime, I was also working on another song. It was originially meant to be a grand ballad, for a fallen hero or something, but now I don't really know. I just can't get the lyrics to gel properly with the music. So I've uploaded just the instrumental, karaoke, if you may. It'll give you a general idea of the rhythm of the song, so that you can help me with the lyrics. Complete lyrics, incomplete lyrics, ideas, praise, criticism, advice, everything is very welcome. Click on the link below:

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Here's your chance to get your name up as a lyricist if I ever become a major star :D...

Rating please!

Hello good people! I recorded a song of sorts- at least a sample. Please have a quick listen and rate it! Click the link below. Let me know if I can improve it. The audio quality's a little bad, recorded using my comp's internal mic. You may have to turn up the volume a bit. (For those who want to know, I used audacity and the recording is in 5 channels).

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